The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001.

The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given line chart illustrates the
quantity
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
of excursions to other nations by UK inhabitants for various intentions
such
Linking Words
as holidays, business,
family
Correct word choice
and family
show examples
visits over a period of 13
years
Use synonyms
from 1989 to 2001. It is clear from the graph that, in 1998, the total
number
Use synonyms
of journeys was the highest. The amount of trips for the purpose of holidays was always higher than others over a period of 13
years
Use synonyms
. The figure for
excursion
Correct article usage
the excursion
show examples
of UK residents going on holiday grew sharply from 30 to 50 million between 1989 and 1998 and hit a peak in 1998.
Then
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
number
Use synonyms
experienced a significant decrease from 50 to 39
units
Use synonyms
in the following
years
Use synonyms
. Regarding the trips for business, there was a slow go up by 2
units
Use synonyms
from 1989 to 1995, and these data dropped slightly between 1995 and 2001 by 2
units
Use synonyms
. With the data
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
family visits purpose, there was a substantial rise over a period of 13
years
Use synonyms
by 7
units
Use synonyms
. Regarding the
number
Use synonyms
of journeys for other purposes,
this
Linking Words
figure jumped moderately from 5 to 8
units
Use synonyms
between 1989 and 1995,
then
Linking Words
there was a steady fall of 6
units
Use synonyms
from 1995 to 2001. The total
number
Use synonyms
of trips climbed rapidly between 1989 and 1998 from 47 to 73,5
units
Use synonyms
.
Then
Linking Words
, there was a slight go down for 12,5
units
Use synonyms
from 1998 to 2001
Submitted by quynhtranhbh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: