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People have differrent job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write ab the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint.

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Many people have the expectations to remain in their
job
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 and
company
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,
whereas
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 others prefer regularly moving to another
job
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. In my opinion, I believe that both views have
its
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their
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 own benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, the option to stabilize in a
job
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 is attractive and adverse for several reasons.
Firstly
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, staff are used to working in
a certain
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a certain job
certain jobs
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jobs
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 so it is more convenient to improve their occupation skills.
For instance
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, a man who has 5 years working in their major has more experience and
knownledge
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knowledge
 in their specialization than
whom
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when
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jobs
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 are changed frequently.
Moreover
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, long-term
dedicating
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 to the
company
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 may bring good working environments for the
employees
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. If staff stay in the same position for too long, they can strengthen the relationship between workmates and
bossess
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bosses
:
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, they may have
satisfied
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a satisfied
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 workplace and chances to move up the career ladder.
However
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,
remainning
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remaining
 in the same
job
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 in the same
company
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 which has many problems might not
a
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be a
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respectable decision.
Specificially
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Specifically
, when a
company
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having
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has
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 issues
such
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 as slave labour or discrimination, it is essential for
employees
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 to move to another occupation to
free
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be free
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 from them.
On the other hand
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, there are
variety
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a variety
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reasons
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of reasons
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 why workers tend to switch careers frequently and who do not.
First,
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many people want to face new challenges after
long
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a long
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 time working. Particularly, they find it
is
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apply
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boring when do the same
job
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 in the same
company
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 so they
looking
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look
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 for novel
experience
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experiences
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.
Moreover
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, they can learn a wide range of knowledge from different
career
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careers
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 when switching
jobs
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.
Nevertheless
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, it is not simple for
employees
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 to change their
jobs
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 regularly. Many companies offer incentives for
employees
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 who stay with them for an extended period,
such
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 as increased vacation time, handsome salaries or more
favorable
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favourable
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 retirement benefits. If you're constantly switching
jobs
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, you may miss out on these opportunities. In conclusion, it seems evident that both stabilizing in the same
job
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 and
company
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 and
switch
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switching
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jobs
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 frequently have their own unique advantages.
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Ensure that you discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint. You have mainly focused on the advantages, so try to provide a more balanced analysis.
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