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The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
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It is
undeniable
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 fact,
doctors
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that doctors
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, teachers and nurses contribute continuously to
social
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the social
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 environment. Our society develops owing to the owners of these professions.
Instead
 of
this
 hard
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working,
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working
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work
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 they earn a
standart
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standard
salary
 that
applied
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is applied
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from
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by
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government
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the government
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, not only in our
country
,
in
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but in
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whole
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the whole
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 world. Sometimes
they
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their
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salaries
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salary
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 levels are not higher than
an
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apply
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average.
However
, the amount of the
salary
 depends on the
standart
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standard
 of
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the
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country
, it is not enough for normal living
in
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apply
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everywhere. It is known that
,
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apply
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each
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in each
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country
 popular
persons
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people
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such
 as entertainment and sports celebrities earn
enermous
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enormous
 incomes. If these persons
compared
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are compared
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 with doctors, nurses and teachers, it can be seen easily their
contribute
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contribution
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 is
equals
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equal
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approximately
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to approximately
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 zero. In my opinion, their incomes directly
depends
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depend
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 on their
talants
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talents
.
Although
 that
only
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is only
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 useful for
theirself
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their self
 İt must be admitted that they are unique and unrepeatable.
An
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The
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 other hand, doctors and teachers are plentiful in every
country
, they are easily replaceable and their wages are determined by the government.
Therefore
, the volume of
salary
 cannot be increased by a fantastic amount. Unfortunately,
İt
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it
 is impossible to increase their
salary
, even if we want
due
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apply
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to automatically
adjusted
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adjust
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according to
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the budjet
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budjet
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budget
 of
country
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the country
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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