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The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts information about the proportion of
people
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 who
involved
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are involved
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 in different physical
activities
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 in Australia, over a 9-year period, starting from 2001. in general, it can be seen that the
quantity
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number
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 of
activities
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 like running experienced the highest change than any other
activities
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.
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, Tennis got the
lower
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lowest
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 amount of engagement of
people
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 over the period shown. Upon closer examination of the data, it is evident that the number of
people
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 enrolled in running,aerobics,
tennis
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and tennis
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 increased
subsequently
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 from 2001 to 2009, which were at 1.4
million
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 ,1.5
million
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,1
million
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 in 2001 and 2.2
million
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 ,1.7
million
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 ,1.2
million
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 in 2009. Surprisingly, the figure for running
activities
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people
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 change happened 156%
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 aerobics and tennis ratios were 11% and 11% respectively. Take a closer look at the remaining data, there were substantial fluctuated from 2001 to 2009 in cycling and swimming
people
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 number,
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 as 4.5
million
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, 3.7 in 2001, 3.1,3.8
million
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 in 2005 and rose to 3.6
million
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,3.3
million
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 in 2009.
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 but not least, the changes in cycling and swimming quantities were -20% and -10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, activities, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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