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You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter: tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel

#weekend #hotel #arrangements #type #rooms #cost #activities #places #interest
Hello Sir, I'd like to
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 a booking for two rooms in your hotel
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this
 weekend. The first room could be a
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room
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 because it's for my mom and dad,
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and the
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 second could be a single room for myself. I
've
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 been planning to do the check-in at 9pm on Saturday and the check-out at 10pm
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 Monday. I saw
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 your hotel website that the time for check-in and
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 started
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evening
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the evening
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, because of
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 I'll pay the Friday too. For
this
 one
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 the price that the website gives to me stays around
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$350, correct? I'd like to pay
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 credit card. I'd like some recommendations for that weekend, I saw
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 the website that near to the hotel have a park to do some radical sports and activities like canoeing, climbing, rafting, and so on. Could you please recommend some of
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 sports for me to do with my parents? Best regards.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accommodation
  • Arrival and departure
  • Sea view
  • Family suite
  • Cost estimate
  • Activities and amenities
  • Water sports
  • Cultural sites
  • Natural attractions
  • Places of interest
  • Confirmation of booking
  • Warm regards
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