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The pie charts introduce the proportion of online shopping sales in Canada in 2005 and 2010 for retail sectors.

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The pie charts introduce the proportion of online shopping sales in Canada in 2005 and 2010 for retail sectors. As can be seen from the pie charts online shopping sales have three categories.
For example
, electronics and
appliance
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appliances
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,food and beverage, home furnishings and video games
separated
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 by different colours. Now turning to the details of
2005
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the 2005
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 year’s sales. It is crystal clear that electronics and appliance
is
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are
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 leading with 35 per
cent
 than in
2010
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the 2010
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 year.
Furthermore
,
twenty five
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 per
cent
 of home furnishings,
whereas
 the average for in 2010 year in
this
 category is a small minority.
In addition
,
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the percentages
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the percentages
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percentages
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percentage
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 of video games are
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a little
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little
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a little
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less
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lower
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.
Wee
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We
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 see from
chart
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the chart
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than
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that
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 in 2010, food and beverage is thirty per
cent
 and
this
 is significantly more in 2005. Video games were a mere 18 per
cent
, but by 2010
this
 figure had grown to almost
quarter
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. In general, the online transactions did progress in terms of only five years in different parts
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