You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The given chart
illustrated
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the rate of five types of
business
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businesses
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making
purchase
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purchases
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(manufacturing, construction, wholesale, retail and
information
&
communication
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and communication
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in Canada
during
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from
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2015 to 2019. All items calculated
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
,
proportion
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the proportion
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on
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of
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information
and
communication
was highly
domination
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in five
years
while
the lowest
proportion
was in 2015 for all items. In the first
years
, the
proportion
on
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construction, manufacturing and retail
only
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no more than 35% compared to wholesale and
information
or
communication
(more than 40%). In the
years
of
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2016 and
2017
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2017,
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the
proportion
was similar in 4 items and only in manufacturing it
looked
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different, there was a 5% gap between
of
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this
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these
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years
. In 2018 and 2019 was the most
domination
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proportion
for all categories compared to other
years
.
In
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this
years
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year
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the higher was in
information
and
communication
(more than 70
percent
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per cent
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) and the lower was in construction (no more than 55
percent
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per cent
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)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words information, communication, proportion, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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