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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is undoubtedly
truth
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 that, Few people concur that discussing with the
labours
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 and managers
have
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 played a significant role in the company because
of
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they improve not only social skills but
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 enhance cognitive power
while
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 others notion that other resources
such
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,
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 becoming comfortable
environment
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 and dress codes are crucial to every persons. Commencing with the one legitimate side, there are seen that human
resouces
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resources
 and older staff are must be vital for the fresher staff as when new employers come to the institute where they need to learn more rules and
regulation
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 for improvement. so
this
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 technique can increase
revenue
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of
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them
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if they talk with
manager
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the manager
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 in their company.
Moreover
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, learning and understanding practical
work
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 can be easier
to
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 them even if they stand with their
collegue
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colleague
colleagues
 who
work
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 in the same building.
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, In
india
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, there are some huge companies
gives
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that gives
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 better advice to their client for improving their lifestyle.
hence
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, meeting with
manger
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managers
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 and co-workers
are
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 essential to
grow
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 success in
the
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buisness
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business
 life. On the other side, there are some classifications which are needed for all the workers
such
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calm
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environment
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 without any
worryness
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worries
as well as
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 wearing
dress
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a dress
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 code to maintain their professional life. What is more,
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a silence
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silence
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environment
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 is
must
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a must
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 for the employer, dressing sense
offer
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offers
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 responsibility in their
work
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 prospects since it provides satisfaction to them to
work
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 in
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a concentrate
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concentrate
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 manner if
that
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those
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 factors are available.
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, some examiners have researched that if crowd
work
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the
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a
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 comfortable
environment
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apply
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so that
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they do not
mistake
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mistakes
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 in their routine
work
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 and feel enthusiasm.
To conclude
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, Even though both points are
magnificient
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magnificent
 to the employer, comfortable surroundings must be available for every
workers
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worker
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 as it not only
improve
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improves
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 social skills but
also
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would learn
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teaches
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 clothing sense in their company.

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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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