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popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really wants to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The way
people
 spend their leisure time is influenced by fashionable
trends
 which are upgrading each year and it is becoming less common for
people
 to pick up their
hobbies
 based on personal pleasure.
While
 I partly agree with
this
 assertion, I cannot deny the important role of individual entertainments each person follows. On the one hand, with advances in technology and widespread use of the internet
as well as
 social media,
people
 have more access to a range of activities and recreational ways than before.
For example
, a person from a desert region may not be familiar with sports like surfing which is commonplace in coastal cities, so with shared videos and feelings he or she may try and
therefore
 choose it as a hobby.
Moreover
, popular ways of spending leisure may partly distract a person from what they have chosen, but they will never have long-term affection for their main
hobbies
.
On the other hand
, we humans are still separable through our characteristics and despite the deep impact of
trends
, we mostly enjoy doing whatever we are good at and what matches our personality as well.
Furthermore
, recreational options that modernized community offers populations could be easily ignored by those who are already fond of something to do in their free time,
otherwise
Add a comma
otherwise,
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 these
trends
 can even lead them to a wider world of
hobbies
 to pick reflecting a feeling they have been looking for. In conclusion,
although
 there are some famous, changeable
hobbies
 around the world following yearly
trends
, I believe
people
 still consider personal perspectives to do a particular activity.
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