The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of  Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons  where relevant
The table and
charts
illustrates
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facts on the
income
and outcome of police in
United
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Kingdom in 2017 and
following
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year in millions of pounds . The table displays the way
of
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money
come
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from and
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visualize how they
spent
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their
income
in
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each year.
According to
the table, national government, local taxes and other sources
such
as grants are the main
income
sources of revenue. The national government has contributed
huge
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part of the budget. When considering
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,
the
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huge amount of
money
has
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distributed for salaries
while
rest
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of them are
spending
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for
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technology and building and transport. In 2017,
national
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government
has given
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around 176 and it has increased
nearly
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178 in 2018. The second most
income
is from taxes and it
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over 100 in 2018
although
it was 92.2 in 2017. The other sources
such
as grants gave 38 and 38.5 respectively in 2017 and 2018. When considering
charts
, in 2017 three quarts
from
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fourth
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have
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spent
for
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officers and staff salaries though it was downwards to 69% in 2018. The
money
for technology has increased by 6% up to 14% in 2018.
However
, in both years,
money
distribution for buildings and transport are same and it was 17%
from
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total expenditure
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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