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You have bought somne clothing online and not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you have bought the clothing from. In your email: - give details of the purchase - explain the problem - explain why you need a replacement urgently.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my online purchase from your online platform
last
 week. My order number is JE2305M and the outfit
recieved
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received
 is not in
a
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apply
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good condition. Starting with the order number mentioned above, it was placed by me
on
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last
saturday
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Saturday
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 for my elder brother.
Moreover
,
this
 shopping was a part of your Mega Million Sale 2023 that started
last
 week. I received the clothing yesterday, and
this
 piece of apparel is really
disapointing
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disappointing
.
Firstly
,
this
 Peter England shirt is not having buttons on a cup of
right hand
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 sleeve.
Secondly
, there is a small hole below the collar of
this
causual
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casual
causal
 wear. Obviously,
this
 is not acceptable from a big brand name like you.
Nevertheless
, I assume you will replace the faulty garment
on
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 a high priority. Because my purchase is a gift to my brother for his birthday
this
 Friday.
That is
 why,
this
 should be resolved within a couple of
day
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. I look forward to receiving a prompt reply! Yours faithfully, Ravindra Rajole
Submitted by ravirajole on

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Provide more specific details about the purchase, such as the date, time, and item purchased.
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Improve the accuracy of your grammar by paying attention to verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word choice.

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