The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in tow years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in tow years.
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The shown pie chart presents information about the comparison of
energy
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production
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. As can be seen, all countries’
profit
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profits
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increased and
according to
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the latest statistics,
the
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coal, petrol and gas mostly
use
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for
energy
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production
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instead
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of nuclear and other
energy
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sources. We can see that one of the major
source
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, the coal raised up to 30.93% from 29.8% during 1995-2005 in
energy
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production
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.
Also
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, the portion of another major
soruce
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source
, gas increased to 30.31% from 29.63% in the same years. If we back
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details, the
rate
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of nuclear
energy
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production
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nearly doubled and recorded the highest increase
rate
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. But, the
rate
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of petrol
energy
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had gone down to 19.55
percent
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from 29.27% and recorded the highest decrease
rate
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. Too, other
energy
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resources followed
upward
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an upward
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trend in
decade
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a decade
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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