IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

#percentages #sodium #fats #sugars #meals #usa
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie charts display information about average percentages of unhealthy nutrition contained in breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks in the USA. Ingredients
such
 as
sodium
, processed
sugar
, and saturated fat were proven to be unhealthy if consumed on a daily basis. In general, consumers gained
most
Correct article usage
the most
show examples
 fat and
sodium
 from their dinner,
while
sugar
 was highly received from snacks. From the start of the day, only by eating breakfast would obtain around 15%
from
Change preposition
apply
show examples
sodium
, fat, and
sugar
 respectively. The numbers of mentioned nutrition soared up
while
 taking a work or school lunch. As shown in the diagram, lunch foods contained large sums of
sodium
 and saturated fat
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
nearly 30% each,
while
 the
sugar
 percentage was almost 20%. The highest amount of
sodium
 is retained from consuming dinner meals by more than 40%. People
also
 gained more fat than other meals by more than one-third of
overall
 intakes, followed by
sugar
 that was far below the previous two ingredients.
Excessive
Change the article
An excessive
The excessive
show examples
 number of sweet condiments is added
into
Change preposition
to
show examples
 light meals by almost half of the charts, followed by saturated fat (21%) and
sodium
 (14%).
Submitted by maukaburtubel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: