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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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compression
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 England and
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Wales
 from 1918 to 201.
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 the rented households was raised
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 81
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between
 1939
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 1953. From 196
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dramaticly droped
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dramatically dropped to
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 35
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stayed
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 the same until 201.
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 rented households and
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 38%. The same
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 the owned ones
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 raise from %12
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 1953
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 the percentage.
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 69%
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 the owned accommodation and it was 62%.
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the rented and owned households
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dropped through
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1918
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ni, ti, ot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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