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Line gragh shows the percentage of women employed in four countries

The chart illustrates the women’s employment rate in four nations, namely the USA, Korea, Afghanistan and France over a
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 of 20 years. By and large, there was a significant increase in female participation in the workforce throughout the
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 except for Afghanistan. The United States had the highest percentage of female employees, with 40
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 of women employed in 1985. The rate increased steadily and reached 62
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 in 2000 before falling slightly to 60
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at the end
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 of the
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.
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, France saw a drop in the percentage of employed women from 40
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 to 35
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 in 1990 before it soared to 55
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 by 2000 and remained stable until the end of the
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. As regards Korea, the proportion of women going to work experienced a steady rise throughout the
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. It started at 20
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 at the beginning of the
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 and eventually doubled by 2005.
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, women’s workforce participation rate in Afghanistan went up slightly, from around 32
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 in 1985 to approximately 37
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 before plummeting again to only 3
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 by 2005.

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