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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives information about the total
number
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 of telephone calls in three different categories: Local-fixed
line
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, National and international-fixed
line
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 and Mobiles between 1995 and 2002 in the UK.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the total
number
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 of mobiles and national and international-fixed
line
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call
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calls
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 show
increasing
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an increasing
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trend
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,
while
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 local-fixed
line
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 calls
see
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show
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 a decline in
trend
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. In 1995, Local-fixed
line
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 calls
was
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were
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 the most popular calls made in the UK at over 70
billion
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minutes
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.
This
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 call type continues to become the most used by people and reached its peak in 1990 with 90
billion
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minutes
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. After 1999,
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trend
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decline
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declined
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 over time with only just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 2022.
In
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On
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 the other hand, National and International fixed
line
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 and mobile calls show a positive
trend
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 during the period. In 1995, national and international calls made a total
number
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 of telephone calls at just below 40
billion
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minutes
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.
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This
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These
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 numbers grow steadily over time and reach slightly over 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2022.
Furthermore
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, Mobile
call
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calls
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 made a significant growth compared to
other type
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another type
other types
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. In 1995, the total
number
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 of
minutes
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 made by mobile
only
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was only
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at
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apply
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4
bilion
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billion
minutes
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.
This
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number
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 rose sharply with over 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 2022.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, line, trend, billion, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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