The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
percantage
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percentage
of 18-25 aged
students
in the
universities
of Singapore, Malaysia,
Philippines
, and Thailand between 1961 and 2011.
Overall
, 18-25 year olds
students
in
universities
increased
throught
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throughout
through
the period.
While
Thailand's
universities
has
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a
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the
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highest
percantege
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percentage
of
students
from
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of
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these ages,
Philippines
universities
expreinced
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experienced
lowest
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the lowest
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proportion. Between 1961 and 1991, Thailand's
universities
saw
fluctations
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fluctuations
in
proportion
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the proportion
a proportion
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of 18-25 ages
students
(25%).
Similarly
, Singapore's
universities
showed
same
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the same
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osillation
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oscillation
but
in
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an
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upward
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an upward
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trend. After 1991,
involvment
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involvement
to
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in
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Singapore's
universities
from these ages rose sharply and reached to highest
percantege
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percentage
(almost 42%). From 1961 to 1991, young proportions of
students
whose
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who
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went to
universities
from Malaysia and
Philippines
rose from nearly 2% and 7% to 15%, respectively. After that year,
proportions
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the proportions
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in
Malaysia
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Malaysian universities
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Universities
stayed
same
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the same
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,
while
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippine's
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ones showed slightly
grow
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growth
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, universities, philippines with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • higher education
  • trend
  • contrast
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • plateau
  • governmental policies
  • economic situations
  • cultural attitudes
  • education growth
  • correlation
  • historical events
  • political events
  • projection
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