There is a line graph that illustrates proportion of tourists who visited attraction in Brighton, England.

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There is a line graph that illustrates

proportion

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the proportion

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of tourists who visited

attraction

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attractions

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in Brighton, England. We can see from the chart that all of the lines fluctuated except the yellow one with a steady position. The highest peak in the graph was made by

pavilion

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the pavilion

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in contrast

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to the lowest point from

art

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the art

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gallery. During the 1980s to

1995s

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1995s,

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there was a sharp increase in visitors to the pavilion reaching

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almost 50% followed by

dramatic

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a dramatic

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decline to 35%. Art

gallery

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galleries

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experienced

similar

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a similar

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situation with a sharp

dercease

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decrease

in 1985 from 37% to 20% in

1990s

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the 1990s

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moreover

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they

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had

losen

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lost

the 3rd position on the graph to the pier. There was an upward trend from two lines: red and

gray

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. They have

countinued

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continued

rising with some fluctuations until 2010 in comparison with dropped blue and yellow lines. The blue line looked similar to the

gray

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one until 2000 when the first one started to

fell

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slighlty

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slightly

and the second line climbed sharply.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

163 words

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Today news plays a crucial role in people's lives and more significantly influences people than before. Why is this case? It is a positive or negative development?

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