The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Australian household energy use water heating 30% heating 42% cooling 2% refrigeration 7% - other appliances 15% lighting 4% Australian household greenhouse gas emissions heating 15% cooling 3% lighting 8% water heating 32% refrigeration 14% other appliances 28%

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Australian household energy use

water heating

30%

heating

42%

cooling

2%

refrigeration

7%

- other appliances

15%

lighting

4%

Australian household greenhouse gas emissions

heating

15%

cooling

3%

lighting

8%

water heating

32%

refrigeration

14%

other appliances

28%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, process, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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