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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and pie charts provide information on how much budget
that
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 Britain police
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apply
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area received in 2017 and 2018 and how it was allocated.
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, the amount of money that came
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from all
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 sources increased.
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 other units experienced either reduction or addition,
building
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 was the only one that received stable funding from
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 to
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 with, the total budget in 2017 was 304.7m.
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 money
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 received from National Government (175.5m), Locat Taxes (91.2m), and other sources
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 as grants (38m). The number increased in the following
year
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 to 318.6m. The total Increased in the following
year
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 by 13.9m and
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 collected from National Government (177.8), Local Taxes (102.3m), and other sources
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 as grants (38.5m). The money allocation for buildings and transport
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 17% in both 2017 and 2018.
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one
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the one
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 hand,
officers
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officers'
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 and staff's salaries which were 75% in 2017 cut
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 in 2018 by 6%.
In
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contrary
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, technology which
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 distributed with
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% budget received
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an additional
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 6% in the following
year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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