Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: ● Say why you would like to go on the trip ● Suggest what you could do to help during the trip ● Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mr. Smith, I am Shiva Prasad, father of Devansh, who was studying in the 4th class in your school. I came to know that a school trip is planned to abroad for 3 days. I am writing
this
letter to inform my willingness
in attending
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the camp
in
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overseas. These days,
due to
the heavy
work
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lord I feel
myself
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exhausted, so I am inclined towards the programme
inorder
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to unwind, and spend
ample
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amount of time with my children. As
the
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I work for a travel company in
visakhapatnam
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,
in
addition
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I have been to Srilanka
for
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2 times.
Therefore
, I Could aid you
in
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the accommodation required during the period
Furthermore
, I have
friend
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working for a missionary school in that country. we could request him to arrange a travel bus for us. May I know the date of return, so that I can apply for leave
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Furthermore
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can we bring our relatives asking with us for the trip? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Shiva
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the question fully and appropriately
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more coherent and cohesive manner, with clear paragraphing and appropriate use of linking words

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • valuable experience
  • expertise
  • educational objectives
  • supervision
  • ensure safety
  • bonding
  • workshops
  • logistics
  • coordinates
  • travel arrangements
  • clear communication
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • manage schedules
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