The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make companies where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make companies where relevant.
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The two bar graphs illustrate the correlation between various ages students' reasons for studying and the number of
employees
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that support the student 's claims.
Overall
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,
employees
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support students under the
age
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of 16 most
while
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individuals from the
age
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30
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of 30
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- 39 receive the least amount of help. As seen in the bar graphs, the two
age
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groups that gain the most encouragement from adult workers are students under 16 and 19. Pupils younger than 16 received 60 out of 70
employees
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that are willing to provide aid
while
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learners at the
age
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of 16 to 19 obtained help from 50 out of 70 adult
employees
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.
On the contrary
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, the two
age
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groups that received the least amount of support by workers are groups from 30 to 39 and 40 to 49. Individuals aged 30 to 39 only acquire approximately 33 out of 70 workers' help
while
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individuals aged from 40 to 49 received a slightly higher amount of help which is 38 out of 40.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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