You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the various types of educational qualification in Australia in 1999 broken down by gender.
Overall
, it is evident that there was a great disparity in education between men and female. What is striking the most
looking
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at the data is the fact that the majority of higher academic qualifications were reached by
males
.
While
70 % and 55 % of women held an undergraduate
diploma
and bachelor's degree, Postgraduate
diploma
and Master's degree were only finished by 30 % and 40 %, respectively.
Whereas
males
earned higher academic
certificaticates
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certificate cates
more often, the majority of skilled vocational
diploma
holders,
,
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which is the lowest certificate,
was
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were
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also
represented by men. Interestingly, 90 % finished school with
this
type which is in stark contrast
of
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the predominance in the higher educational segment looking at 70 % of postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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and 60 % Master's
degree
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degrees
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which were
hold
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by them. In
conlucion
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conclusion
,
although
the majority of skilled
vocation
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diploma
holders were
males
, it cannot be overstated that
males
experienced a
further
in-depth education compared to females in 1999.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, diploma with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • post-school qualifications
  • gender disparity
  • representation
  • overshadow
  • notable
  • predominantly
  • overall trend
  • significant
  • minimal gap
  • participation
  • comparison
  • qualification levels
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