The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

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line graph provides information regarding how many people were employed in the USA.

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, all factors are in the decreasing trend except for services which soared exponentially in 1979 and is predicted to still increase by 2025, occupying the first place. In detail, the figure which showed the most notable change is agriculture. In 1975, most people were employed in the agriculture field,

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, the employment rate stayed at 80%, it declined drastically from 199. After

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, the change was more stable, but it was still declining

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2025 by around 10%. In the case of manufacturing, it picked at 40% in 1980, following the number of

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employment, and it went down

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portion to agriculture, 10%.

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