The chart shows the proportion of energy produced from different sources in a country between1985 and 2003.

The chart shows the proportion of energy produced from different sources in a country between1985 and 2003.
The pie
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graphs
grapes
graph
give information about the margins of different types of resources used in producing
energy
in a country, between 1985 and 2003.
Overall
,
oil
remained the main
source
of
energy
in both years,
although
natural gas, coal, and nuclear
interchangeably
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utilised. Meanwhile, other renewable resources stayed
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bottom of the list. In 1985,
oil
was the widely used
source
of
energy
, occupying more than half of the whole portion, with around
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a 52
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% margin. Meanwhile, Nuclear, followed by
oil
, was the second most used
energy
source
with 22% of the whole. In the same year, other four resources,
such
as coal, hydro, natural gas, and other renewable had portions that only ranged from 1% -13%, respectively. A lot of things
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changed in 2003, where natural gas and coal topped nuclear with 22% and 23% against nuclear's 8%,
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contrary to 1985 records.
Although
oil
stayed at the top, the usage of
this
source
visibly decreased, as illustrated
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in
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its 39% margin.
Similarly
, other renewable remained the
last
, despite the slight increase of 4%.
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