The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams illustrate the
cement
production process and its usage to produce concrete for
building
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the building
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process.
Overall
,
cement-making
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the cement-making
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process involves four stages, including crushing, mixing, heating, and grinding. Following that,
cement
will be required to produce concrete.
Firstly
, limestone and clay were inserted
to
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a crusher to combine and form them into powder. After that,
powder
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the powder
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will be mixed in a clinker prior to
be
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being
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heated in a rotating heater. Shortly after, the rotating heater will clink the materials before being
grinded
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ground
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and
formed
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forming
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cement
. The end product,
cement
, will be packed into bags for distribution or used
further
to produce concrete. In the next step, concrete will be made from
the
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a
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combination of 15%
cement
, 10% water, 25% sand, and 50% gravel. The materials will be mixed to result in concrete,
further
used for building purposes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • stages
  • equipment
  • cement-making process
  • raw materials
  • crushed
  • heated
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • ground
  • fine powder
  • sand
  • gravel
  • water
  • concrete
  • building purposes
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