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The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.

The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
The line chart displays data about
production
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the production
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 of paper,
wood
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pulp
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 and
sawn-
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sawn wood
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wood
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 in the United Kingdom from 1980 to 2000. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, It can be seen that the paper and packaging had the highest figures,
while
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wood
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pulp
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 remained steadily unchanged and the sawn-woos showed negligibly lowest rates over the period. Despite
risen
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 negligibly from 230
million
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 tonnes in 1990 paper and packing sharply increased to 350
in
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 the end of the period.
Sawn-
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Sawn wood
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wood
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 and
wood
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pulp
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 were considerably lower. The figures of the sawn-
wood
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 started fell steadily from 200 to 150
million
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 tones
,
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 and has
it
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 lowest
rates
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rate
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 of 75 produce in 2020.
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,
wood
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pulp
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 began lower at 165
million
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tones
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tonnes
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, decreased gradually to 150 in 1990 and
then
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 recovered slightly to approximately 155
million
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 tonnes in the of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wood, pulp, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • production
  • paper
  • wood pulp
  • sawn-wood
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • significant
  • turning point
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • environmental policy
  • demand
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • projections
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