The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity: 2010 1P oU Vri Percentage (%) 60 7 50 40 30 20 10 0- 52.8 52.5 53.3 53 47.7 48.9 46.747.1 45.1 42.2 43.1 39.5 15 to 24 25 to 34 35 to 44 45 to 54 Age group 55 to 64 65 and over

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity: 2010

1P

oU

Vri

Percentage (%)

60 7

50

40

30

20

10

0-

52.8

52.5

53.3

53

47.7

48.9

46.747.1

45.1

42.2

43.1

39.5

15 to 24

25 to 34

35 to 44

45 to 54

Age group

55 to 64 65 and over
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chart representing the trends in day-to-day physical activity by Australian
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in various
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in 2010. The begin with, the
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are leading in all
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except in 15 to 24
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, 45 to 54
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doing a higher level of activities at 53.3%. In
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, 15 to 24 categories did a higher level at 52.8%.
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, women at 65 and over
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and
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at 35 to 44 people are doing lower physical activities in day-to-day life.
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, after 24 years old
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are reducing their physical work than
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. Remarkably, between 35 to 64 years old
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are doing work almost equal percentage at nearly 53%.
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, after 65 years both genders have almost equal physical strength rather than other
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at approximately 47%.
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, between the ages 35 to 44
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stage women are doing physical activities more than 10%.
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