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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. WRITI You sho Write a in a sur citi tra D Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013) GiV knC Wi 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% 15% 10% 5% 0% Every day Several times a week Once a week Once or twice a month A few times a year Never 2003 2006 У 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. WRITI You sho Write a in a sur citi tra D Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013) GiV knC Wi 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% 15% 10% 5% 0% Every day Several times a week Once a week Once or twice a month A few times a year Never 2003 2006 У 2013
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The given image depicts a bar chart representing the trends in the consumption of fast
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 in the USA between 2003 and 2013.
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 with, most
people
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 consume their fast
food
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 in once a week between 2003 and 2013. In 2013 they changed their habits to taking once or twice a month.
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, a lower number of society took every day fast
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 between 2003 and 2013.
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, in 2016 and 2013 equal amount of
people
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 consumed their street foods at 15%. In the same year, they had a lower amount of snacks
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every day and some were never consumed. Remarkably, in 2003,
people
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's consumption level had increased consistently,
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 they had eaten more fast
food
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 once a week.
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, in 2013, more
people
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 reduced their consumption level
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 having once or twice a month at approximately 32%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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