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Band 3.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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Based on the information given in the question I do understand over the period of 10
years
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 the
usage
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 of
the
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apply
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electronic equipment
have
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 changed.
Usage
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 of tablets starting from 2002 around have increased much over the period of
next
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the next
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 12
years
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 to 2015, I could see
stady
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steady
 growth compared to the
usage
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 of MP3 Players.
Usage
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 of
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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 started in 1995, within 5
years
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 to
years
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 2000
have
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increased
8
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% around to 70% and beyond
years
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 2000 onwards have increased from 70% to 90%. I could observe year 2000 onwards a moderate
increased
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.
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However
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usage
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 of tablets in
this
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 period from 2002 to 2015
have
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 increased at a higher rate. I
observe
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 from 1995
onwards
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apply
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to 2015
have
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it has
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 increased stady.
On
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overall
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 all four electronic
devices
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devices'
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usage
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have
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has
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 increased
upwards
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however
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,
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how ever
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however
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 three products
usage
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 of MP3 Player has increased only up to 30%
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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