You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Based on the information given in the question I do understand over the period of 10
years
the usage
of the
electronic equipment Correct article usage
apply
have
changed.
Change the verb form
has
Usage
of tablets starting from 2002 around have increased much over the period of next
12 Correct article usage
the next
years
to 2015, I could see stady
growth compared to the Correct your spelling
steady
usage
of MP3 Players.
Usage
of mobile
Add an article
the mobile
phone
started in 1995, within 5 Fix the agreement mistake
phones
years
to years
2000 have
increasedUnnecessary verb
apply
8
% around to 70% and beyond Change preposition
by 8
years
2000 onwards have increased from 70% to 90%. I could observe year 2000 onwards a moderate increased
. Replace the word
increase
However
Add a comma
However,
usage
of tablets in this
period from 2002 to 2015 have
increased at a higher rate.
I Correct subject-verb agreement
has
observe
from 1995 Wrong verb form
observed
onwards
to 2015 Rephrase
apply
have
increased stady.
Wrong verb form
it has
On
Change preposition
Overall
overall
all four electronic devices
Change noun form
devices'
usage
have
increased Correct subject-verb agreement
has
upwards
, Rephrase
however
Rephrase
apply
how ever
compared to Correct your spelling
however
other
three products Correct article usage
the other
usage
of MP3 Player has increased only up to 30%Submitted by thiliniranatunga1994 on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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