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The pie chart below the proportions of visit to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.

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The
pie
 charts illustrate the percentages of attends to Irelands during the past year, and by sex and reason of visit. We can observe from the
pie
 charts that around
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half of
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the visitor
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visitor
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visitors
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 belong to the 45-54
years
 old and 25-34
years
 old people, and most of them came for leisure, not business. The first
pie
 chart demonstrates that three age groups comprised a large proportion of
last
 year’s
visitors
 to Ireland. There were 45-54
years
 (23%), 25-34 (23%),
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-44 (19%),
while
rest
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 of
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 groups just indicated a small minority, ranging from 6% to 11%.
Accordingly
, a very small proportion belongs to 0-15
years
visitors
,
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 up just 6%. The second
pie
 chart depicts the ratio of
purpose
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 of visiting
to
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Ireland. The total proportion of male
visitors
 was higher than female
visitors
 (56% to 44%). The fraction of male leisure
visitors
 consisted
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 per cent in comparison to women business visits, 17%.
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