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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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,
while
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 the pie chart shows the types of
crime
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 in the UK.
Overall
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, the
crime
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 rate is significantly higher in the 16-24
age
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 group than in the rest of the population.
On the other hand
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, violent
crime
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 accounts for almost half of the four different types of
crime
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. As far as the relationship with
age
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 is concerned, we can see that there is no criminal activity until the
age
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 of 8.
On the other hand
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, involvement starts at
age
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 12 with 5 (tens of thousands) and rises remarkably to 70 at
age
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 16.
Furthermore
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, one of the most significant data is that the number of crimes peaks at the
age
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 of 20,
while
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 after that we can clearly see a decreasing trend.
In addition
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, as people get older, the number of crimes decreases, so there is a negative correlation between
age
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 and the number of crimes committed. When it comes to the pie chart, there are four different types of
crime
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 and violent
crime
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 is the most common type of
crime
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 with 46%, followed by property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 with 23% and 22% respectively. The
last
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 type of
crime
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, public order
crime
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, is the least common type of
crime
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 in the UK with only 9%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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