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the graph below shows the proportion of aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the proportion of aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The proffered line chart displays the percentage of
people
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 in three different countries aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040.
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, it is clearly seen that 65-year-old
people
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 experienced significant upward in Japan, Sweden, and the USA during the period. Based on the graph, at the beginning of the period, Japanese aged 65 or more slightly decreased. it dropped below 5%. In the next 20 years (from 1960 to 1980), the data showed progress did not change
while
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people
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 aged 65 and over soared dramatically from 10% to 25% around 2020. Afterwards, the number of 65-year-old
people
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 steadily increased.

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