The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
number
of tourists who visited four different attractions in England, specifically in Brighton, during the time
period
from 1980 to 2010. The measurements are given in percentages.
Overall
, the
number
of tourists who visited the pier and pavilion increased from 1980 to 2010.
However
, the
number
of
visitors
to the art gallery in Brighton decreased,
while
the
number
of
visitors
to the festival remained relatively unchanged by the end of the
period
. The percentage of tourists who visited the pier in Brighton fluctuated from the beginning of the
period
to 2000, and
then
it started to gradually increase, reaching approximately 21%. In terms of
visitors
to the pavilion, the graph shows a significant increase from the start of the
period
to 1995 when it reached its highest point at 48% of
visitors
.
Afterward
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, it began to decline, reaching 31% by 2010. Regarding
visitors
to the art gallery, the graph demonstrates an increase followed by a subsequent decrease from 1980 to 1990. After 1990, the percentage of
visitors
remained relatively unchanged and
then
gradually decreased. The
number
of
visitors
to the festival varied between 26% and 30% but did not exceed 30% from 1980 to 2010.
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