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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Wnte at least 150 words 90 80 70 60 % of households 6 8 30 20 10 0 Households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales 1918 to 2011 1918 1939 1953 1961 1971 1981 1991 2001 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Wnte at least 150 words 90 80 70 60 % of households 6 8 30 20 10 0 Households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales 1918 to 2011 1918 1939 1953 1961 1971 1981 1991 2001 2011
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The given image depicts a bar chart representing the trends in the percentage of households whether they owned or rented in England and whales between 1918 and 2011. As can be seen from the graph, the rented
accommodation
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has
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was
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 high in 1918
then
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 it was consistently reduced until 2001.
Whereas
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, the ownership of household
accommodation
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 was lower in 1918 after
following
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the following
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 years it
was
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increased gradually until 2001.
On the other hand
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, the owning and renting accommodations were equal level in 1971 at 50%.
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, the higher difference between rent and owned housing percentage in 1918 at almost 50%. Remarkably, between 1939 and 1953 rented and owned
accommodation
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has
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 equal levels at approximately 7% and 30%.
Moreover
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, people
bought
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who bought
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 their own homes
was
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apply
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increased consistently
at
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for
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 almost 83 years
then
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 it saw little reduction in 2011.
Likewise
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, the rented
Accommodation
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 was decreased continuously.
However
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, in 2011, it saw small improvements in both countries.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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