The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Wnte at least 150 words 90 80 70 60 % of households 6 8 30 20 10 0 Households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales 1918 to 2011 1918 1939 1953 1961 1971 1981 1991 2001 2011
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The given image depicts a bar chart representing the trends in the percentage of households whether they owned or rented in England and whales between 1918 and 2011.
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it saw little reduction in 2011. Linking Words
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, in 2011, it saw small improvements in both countries.Linking Words
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