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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The table shows the number of money of city which using in five
australian
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Australian
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 cities. The greatest bill
is belong
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 to
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the perb
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perb
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Perb
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 household,meanwhile
melboure
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Melboure
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 has the lowest bill.
Besides
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, not much has changed
of
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in
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 using up to 125KL
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in brisbane
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brisbane
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Brisbane
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,
melbourne
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Melbourne
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 and
sydney
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Sydney
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.
On the other hand
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,
adelaide
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Adelaide
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 and
perth
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Perth
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 paid 0,42$ when using up to 125KL.
However
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,
this
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 cost
growing up
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grows
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 to 1$ and 1,50$ when they use over 125KL at Aledaile and
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Perth
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perth city
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Perth City
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In addition
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, the residents at
brisbane
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Brisbane
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 and
sydney
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Sydney
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 payable in turn are 0,84$ and 0,94$ per
KL
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 of water.
While
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,
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apply
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 the people who lived in
melbourne
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Melbourne
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 paid 0,78$ per
KL
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 of water.
Finally
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, about the bill the number of money which
paid
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was paid
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average
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on average
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 highest
belong
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belongs
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 to
perth
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Perth
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. Residents in
other city
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another city
other cities
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 payable in turn 253$ to 312$ In conclusion,
throught
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through
throughout
this
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 table we can know about the average residents pay each year in
australia
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Australia
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kl with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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