You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter: say which electrical goods you want ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay explain how you will collect the goods

Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter with my full regards that
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am your daily consumer and wish to buy
a premium electronic goods
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premium electronic goods
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from your shop. I have seen the advertisement
of
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new
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electric cooker and pan in the newspaper. I am highly impressed with the automatic
temprature
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temperature
control facilities. I am eagerly waiting for
such
items and I want to buy
it
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. To be very true, I have no idea of the cost of the products. I found it actually needful, and ready to pay
genuine
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price for
such
useful
house hold
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things.
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, kindly let me know the price of these
comodities
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commodities
. I recently shifted to the new home which is actually far away from your shop as
compare
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to my previous location.
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, it would be a great help if you
can
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send products
at
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to
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my office address which is
in
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between my home and your shop. Looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you.
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truely
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truly
Aashima
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