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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the growth and expansion of
Chorleywood
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 village from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that there are
so
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many significant changes in
Chorleywood
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 Village
such
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 as in transportation, land, and infrastructure development.
To begin
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 with, during the first era
in
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from
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 1868 to 1883, the village was still small enough with only one main road. Later in the second
period
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, from 1883 to 1992, the construction of the first land was beginning,
as
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and as
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result
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a result
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 the
Chorleywood
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 Station was built.
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, the railway was
also
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 built in
this
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period
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, exactly in 1909. Next in the third
period
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, from 1922 to 1970, the modern era started
to begin
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. There are two new lands constructed in the south, near
to
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Chorleywood
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 station and railway. Entering the
last
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period
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, from 1970 to 1994, the motorway was built in 1970
as well as
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 the new expansion land. There were 5 new lands, 3 of them were across the motorway and railway, and the rest 2 of them located in the north.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "to begin".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chorleywood, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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