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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »
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The given pie charts illustrate the changes
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 the
fuel
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sources
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 for making
electricity
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 in two different countries in 1980 and 2000. From
this
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 chart, we can immediately observe that the total production of
electricity
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 in 2000 was around twice as it was in 1980, both in
Australia
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 and France.
However
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, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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production
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 by different
fuel
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sources
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 was quite different in both countries. For
Australia
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, in 1980, there were 20
units
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 and 10
units
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 of
electricity
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 produced by natural gas and oil, respectively. Dramatically, in 2000, the demand
of
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 both of these
sources
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 decreased, and only 4
units
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 of
electricity
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 were produced.
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, no significant changes happened in the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 made by hydropower in 1980, and 2000 as well.
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, as a
fuel
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 source that hasn’t been used in
Australia
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, nuclear power seems to be more popular in France, which made 15
units
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 in 1980. In 2000, apparently, nuclear power became the main
fuel
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 source for producing
electricity
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. 126
units
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 of
electricity
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 were made from
this
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 source, which was 8 times as much as the
amount
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 in 1980.
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, there was no change in the usage of coal to make
electricity
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 between 1980 and 2000.
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, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 made by coal increased significantly, compared with in 1980. All in all, there was a lot of change in the different
fuel
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sources
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 for making the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 in
Australia
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 and France in 1980 and 2000

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, sources, electricity, australia, amount, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • units of electricity production
  • fuel source
  • dominant source
  • reliance on coal
  • hydroelectric power
  • natural gas
  • significant reduction
  • primary source
  • drastically increased
  • transition
  • existing infrastructure
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