Nowadays, many families move overseas for job opportunities. Some people think that this is beneficial for the children of these families, while others think chldren will find it difficult. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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It is expected that people aspire for better lives for their
families
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, especially for parents who are motivated to provide comfortable lifestyles to their
children
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. In order to lead a better future for their
children
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, many
families
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today are relocating abroad for job opportunities.
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, others think that moving abroad is a huge and challenging change for
children
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. Both views will be discussed and personal
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will be presented
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of
high paying
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jobs overseas is enormous compared to the
third world
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countries
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.
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is the reason why people in poor
countries
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are looking for work in
western
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countries
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.
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, many Asians are processing their working visa to work and live in Australia or Canada as these
countries
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provide higher salaries and better health care and education for their
families
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. As
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, most citizens in Asia will choose to move
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countries
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with greener
pasture
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pastures
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than stay
in
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their land and allow their
children
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to starve.
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,
children
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find it difficult to adjust abroad, as others perceive that language is a great barrier for them to socialise.
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barrier is a valid reason why some
children
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end up as a victim of bullying. To illustrate, Chinese students in foreign
countries
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are mostly being bullied not only because of their race but
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their way of communication. It is no wonder that they felt excluded and isolated because they
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completely different from other
children
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in their new environment. In conclusion, there
advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of relocating abroad. It is beneficial for parents as they can find better jobs, but it is
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detrimental for
children
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as they can experience being excluded and isolated. In my opinion,
families
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, including parents and
children
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, must discuss both
positive
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and negative effects of moving
in
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to
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another place so that they
could
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can
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help each other to adjust, solve problems and move forward.
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