The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
The pie charts provide information about the data, which is collected by children's
activities
. The first graph gives information about educational and ordinary activities
, which are taken a
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apart
part
by boys
. On the other hand
, the other graph illustrates the activities
, which is
taken by Correct subject-verb agreement
are
girls
.
Overall
, it can be seen that boys
take
a significant Verb problem
play
part
in basketball and computer games, while
girls
prefer to spend their time
on
reading and dancing. Change preposition
apply
Also
, it's important to mention that "Reading"
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the "Reading"
activity
is the most unpopular among the audience, which includes boys
, while
the most underrated activity
among girls
is "Listening to Music".
Boys
audience take a
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apply
part
in different activities
. However
, they prefer to spend their
significant Change the word
a
part
of free
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their free
time
playing basketball (26%) and computer games (34%). The "Soccer" activity
is more unpopular compared to mentioned
categories of Correct article usage
the mentioned
activities
(It takes 17% of all time
). Boys
pay as less
attention Correct word choice
little
on
listening Change preposition
to
music
and skateboarding as soccer, at 10%, 11% and 17% respectively. The most underrated category is "Reading". The audience Change preposition
to music
spend
only 2% of their Change the verb form
spends
time
on this
activity
.
On the other hand
, it's noticeable that the most popular activity
among girls
is "Reading" and "Dancing" (they spend 21% and 27% of their free time
to
these Change preposition
on
activities
). In second place are "Netball" and "Computer games" (15% and 16% of general time
). The most underrated activities
are "Gymnastics" and "Listening to music" (the group of people spend only 11% and 10% of their time
).Submitted by fedorusa2016 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, part, boys, girls, time, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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