The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
The pie charts provide information about the data, which is collected by children's
activities
. The first graph gives information about educational and ordinary Use synonyms
activities
, which are taken Use synonyms
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apart
part
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boys
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On the other hand
, the other graph illustrates the Linking Words
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girls
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Overall
, it can be seen that Linking Words
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activity
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girls
is "Listening to Music".
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part
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activities
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free
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their free
time
playing basketball (26%) and computer games (34%). The "Soccer" Use synonyms
activity
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the mentioned
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music
and skateboarding as soccer, at 10%, 11% and 17% respectively. The most underrated category is "Reading". The audience Change preposition
to music
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girls
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time
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, part, boys, girls, time, activity with synonyms.
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