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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 line graphic provides information about the household recycling percentages in the countries of
UK
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,
France
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 and Germany from, 2005 to 2015.
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, the recycling percentages of the
UK
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 and Germany have experienced in a similar way a significant rise over the years,
while
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 the recycling percentage in
France
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 has experienced a downward trend. In the year
2005
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2005,
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 the recycling rates of the
UK
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 and Germany were 35% and 20%, respectively. These two countries experienced a rise in their recycling rates between the years 2005 and 2015. Despite the fact that the percentages of both countries have improved over the selected period of time,
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UK
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the UK
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finally
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 achieves a better
rate
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 in the year 2015.
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 of
this
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 decade, the recycling
rate
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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 was
of
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60%,
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 Germany’s
rate
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 was of 57%
approximately
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. In early 2005
France
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 collected positive data regarding the recycling rates of the country.
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,
this
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 situation suffered a deterioration over the years. From 2005 to 2015, the mentioned
rate
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 dramatically declined, only registering a percentage of 40% in 2015.
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 of the selected period,
France
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 collected the worst household recycling data.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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