The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park

Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram highlights the data about secondary school at
west
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West Park
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park
that developed in many areas which was built between 1950 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
diagram
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the diagram
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comprised 3 stages, beginning at many houses and ending with convincing in the
car
park
. The stage starts when we may see
some
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several changes. First of all,houses that
located
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are located
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close to
main
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road
removed
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were removed
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and replaced by
car
park
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parks
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.
In addition
,
science
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the science
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block
take
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part of the
scholl
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school
building which is linked to
car
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the car
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park
.
Then
,
farmland
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the farmland
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changed
on
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to
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sports
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the sports
a sports
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field at the right of
playground
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the playground
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.With
regarding
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to
playground
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playgrounds
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,it is still unchanged over the 30 years.
Secondly
,
car
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the car
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park
witnessed
significant
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a significant
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increase
of
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in
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area.
Moreover
,
car
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the car
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park
took
approximately
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up approximately
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50
per centage
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percentage
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of
place
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the place
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. After that,
sports
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the sports
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field experienced
triple
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a triple
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reduce
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reduction
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,
then
removed
on
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apply
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between
car
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the car
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park
and
playground
due to
rise
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the rise
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of
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in
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size parking respectively.
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of
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the stage
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stage
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stage,
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playground
undergo
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a slightly
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slightly
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decrease
of
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in
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area
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the area
an area
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that
exist
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exists
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at the right of
sports
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the sports
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field over the given timeframe
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