Some people are making new friends by using socializing network website and Internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that people should make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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admittedly
true that
people
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friends
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their
this
life and
friends
play a vital role for
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their
entier
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livelihood
.
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most
of
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people
are making new
friends
from
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on
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the internet
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internet
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because they
are spend
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spend
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much
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a lot of
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time
in
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virtually
virtual
. Some
individual
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individuals
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belive
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believe
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that
people
should make new
friends
by
face to face
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face-to-face
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talk and chat. In my opinion, making internet
friends
are good
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rather than
real world
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real-world
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friends
.In
this
essay,
i
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will discuss
about
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apply
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making online
friendship
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friends
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or
offline
friendship
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friends
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which is better and why. It is indeed true that young
people
like to spend
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their
there
time
in
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online. Not only
they
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do they
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spend
time
for
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on
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entatinment
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entertainment
but
also
they are
studing
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studying
,
learning
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new technology,
reading
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read
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newspapere
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newspaper
newspapers
and
gameing
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gaming
so on.
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they spend
time
for
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at
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diffrent parpese
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different parties
but
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they meet
with
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new
people
in
same
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the same
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field which is good because they help each other. Online
frendship
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friends
need more
time
compire
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compared
compare
to
offline
friend
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friends
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because
people
have to know each other first and
also
sometime
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sometimes
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they
are
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apply
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meet
offline
. In
modaren
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modern
time
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times
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people
are not active with others.
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,
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students
are not much
time
with
there
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their
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classmate
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classmates
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which is kind of inactive
for
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with
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eachother
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each other
that
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is why if they are in
friendship
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a friendship
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, it is not carry
thire
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their
relationship for
long
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a long
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term
and
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another fact is individual not
intersted
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interested
to talk
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in talking
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with
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in
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thire
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their
friend
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friends
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in
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is
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online
such
as facebook or other socializing network website.
To sum up
,
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making
friends
are good way to
friendship
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friends
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but it is hard for
long term
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long-term
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relationship.
on
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the other side online
friendship
is a good way to
making
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make
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friend
becouse
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because
in recent
time
people
active
in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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for most of
work
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their work
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which help each others.
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