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Some people are making new friends by using socializing network website and Internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that people should make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
It is
admitedly
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admittedly
 true that
people
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friends
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 in
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thire
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their
this
 life and
friends
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 play a vital role for
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thire
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their
 entier
livelyhood
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livelihood
.
Nowdays
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 most
of
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apply
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people
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 are making new
friends
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from
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on
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the internet
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internet
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 because they
are spend
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spend
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much
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a lot of
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time
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 in
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virtually
virtual
. Some
individual
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individuals
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belive
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believe
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 that
people
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 should make new
friends
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 by
face to face
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face-to-face
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 talk and chat. In my opinion, making internet
friends
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are good
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 rather than
real world
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real-world
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friends
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.In
this
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i
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I
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 will discuss
about
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apply
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making online
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friendship
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friends
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 or
offline
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friendship
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friends
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 which is better and why.
Body paragraph 1
It is indeed true that young
people
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 like to spend
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thire
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their
there
time
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in
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apply
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online. Not only
they
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do they
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 spend
time
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for
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on
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entatinment
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entertainment
 but
also
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 they are
studing
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studying
,
learning
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learn
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 new technology,
reading
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read
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newspapere
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newspaper
newspapers
 and
gameing
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gaming
 so on.
Althugh
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Although
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time
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for
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at
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diffrent parpese
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different parties
but
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apply
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they meet
with
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apply
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new
people
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 in
same
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the same
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 field which is good because they help each other. Online
frendship
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friends
 need more
time
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compire
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compared
compare
 to
offline
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friend
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friends
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 because
people
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 have to know each other first and
also
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sometime
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sometimes
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 they
are
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apply
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meet
offline
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.
Body paragraph 2
In
modaren
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modern
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time
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times
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people
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 are not active with others.
For example
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,
Studants
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students
 are not much
time
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 with
there
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their
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classmate
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classmates
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 which is kind of inactive
for
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with
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eachother
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each other
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that
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That
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 is why if they are in
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friendship
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a friendship
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, it is not carry
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thire
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their
 relationship for
long
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a long
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 term
and
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apply
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another fact is individual not
intersted
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interested
to talk
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in talking
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with
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in
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thire
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their
friend
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friends
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in
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is
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 online
such
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 as facebook or other socializing network website.
Conclusion
To sum up
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,
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friends
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 are good way to
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friendship
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friends
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 but it is hard for
long term
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long-term
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 relationship.
on
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On
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 the other side online
friendship
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 is a good way to
making
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make
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 friend
becouse
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because
 in recent
time
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people
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 active
in
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on
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Add an article
the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 for most of
work
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their work
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 which help each others.

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