The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart
depics
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depicts
depict
information about the proportion of households’s housing status ( owned and rented) between 1918 and 2011 in England and Wales.
Overall
, the families that have their own home showed an upward trend
while
they
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those
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who rented experienced a downward trend.
Nevertheless
, both of them have
a
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the
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same
number
in the middle of the given period. In the first half period, early 19s, the
number
of
family
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families
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that rent a residence was higher than in that of rented, nearly four times at approximately 78%.
However
,
this
number
decreased gradually to about 68% (1939 and 1953) and
slighlty
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slightly
less
60
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than 60
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% (1961)
while
the
number
of rent climbed significantly around 10% every year from 1981 until 1971 which had a proportion between just over 20% and 50%, respectively.
Conversely
, in the following period, the
number
of ownership of
accomodation
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accommodation
ascended dramatically
at
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to
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approximately 60% (1981) and 68% (1991 and 2001), overlapping
in
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with
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that of rented which just under 40%.
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Even though
Eventhough
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Even though
the
number
in that of rent decreased slightly, it still
remain
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remains
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the
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in the
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top position
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • accommodation
  • trend
  • shift
  • households
  • homeownership
  • economic and social circumstances
  • interwar period
  • post-World War II
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • public policy
  • economic prosperity
  • tipping point
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