The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart
depics
information about the proportion of households’s housing status ( owned and rented) between 1918 and 2011 in England and Wales.
Correct your spelling
depicts
depict
Overall
, the families that have their own home showed an upward trend Linking Words
while
Linking Words
they
who rented experienced a downward trend. Correct pronoun usage
those
Nevertheless
, both of them have Linking Words
a
same Correct article usage
the
number
in the middle of the given period.
In the first half period, early 19s, the Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
family
that rent a residence was higher than in that of rented, nearly four times at approximately 78%. Change to a plural noun
families
However
, Linking Words
this
Linking Words
number
decreased gradually to about 68% (1939 and 1953) and Use synonyms
slighlty
less Correct your spelling
slightly
60
% (1961) Change preposition
than 60
while
the Linking Words
number
of rent climbed significantly around 10% every year from 1981 until 1971 which had a proportion between just over 20% and 50%, respectively.
Use synonyms
Conversely
, in the following period, the Linking Words
number
of ownership of Use synonyms
accomodation
ascended dramatically Correct your spelling
accommodation
at
approximately 60% (1981) and 68% (1991 and 2001), overlapping Change preposition
to
in
that of rented which just under 40%. Change preposition
with
Correct your spelling
Even though
Eventhough
the Correct your spelling
Even though
number
in that of rent decreased slightly, it still Use synonyms
remain
Change the verb form
remains
the
top positionChange preposition
in the
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