The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The provided chart illustrates the percentage of elements allying to work operation.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there is the highest
figure
of 18-30
ages
in the
figure
for chance for personal development,
while
the lowest
figure
is seen in the percentages of work environment at the same
ages
.
In addition
, a similar proportion is witnessed by the proportion of team spirit in both kinds of
ages
. In more detail, a similar
figure
of 60% can be seen in the categories of both kinds of
ages
in team spirit, which is opposite to the trends at the chance for private evolution, with more than 40% and roughly 90% at 45-60 and 18-30, respectively.
Additionally
, some sections,
such
as the competent boss, respect from colleagues, job satisfaction and money all have a relatively slight change of percentage between types of years. Looking at the graph, similar to the trend of team spirit, the percentage of work environment is equal at 18-30 and 45-60
ages
, of merely 30%.
Besides
, the proportion of job security at 18-30
ages
is more than twofold the
figure
for 45-60
ages
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • survey
  • personnel department
  • major company
  • age group
  • work performance
  • factors
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • common
  • significant
  • differences
  • important
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