You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ●describe the problem with the equipment ●explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing regarding

for

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my recently purchased item from your

shop

. I bought

last

3 days ago. Unfortunately, the equipment that I bought is not working. I already

inform

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the

shop

but

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there no

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response yet.

Furthermore

, when I

am turn

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on the equipment

their

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is no light to indicate if it is on/off

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that

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I double the circuits in my house if

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broken but

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working in other

equiments

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requirements

Then

, I try again your items to double if it is working unfortunately is not working.

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, I already

inform

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your

shop

regarding

for

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this

problem but they

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are angy

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angy

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angry

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me. The tone of his

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voice is shouting

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me. I am talking to him

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a good manner for asking regarding

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the item.

However

, I would to request a replacement for

this

item.

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, please inform your staff to be nice to the

costumer

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who

asling

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asking

question

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regarding

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the items that they

dont

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do not

know. I

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custumer

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customer

service representative and

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a custumer

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custumer

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customer

survey so that you can

evalaute

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evaluate

your

shop

what

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is the problem. I hope I will hear from you soon. Yours faithfully,

Austia

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Austria

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coherence cohesion

Be clear and concise in describing the problem with the equipment.

coherence cohesion

Organize your ideas in a logical manner, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.

grammatical range

Use a wider range of grammatical structures to demonstrate your language proficiency.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

204 words

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