You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ●describe the problem with the equipment ●explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing regarding
for
my recently purchased item from your Change preposition
apply
shop
. I bought last
3 days ago. Unfortunately, the equipment that I bought is not working. I already inform
the Wrong verb form
informed
shop
but no
response yet.
Correct pronoun usage
there no
Furthermore
, when I am turn
on the equipment Change the verb form
turn
their
is no light to indicate if it is on/offReplace the word
there
,
so Remove the comma
apply
that
I double the circuits in my house if Correct word choice
apply
is
broken but Correct subject-verb agreement
are
is
working in other Correct subject-verb agreement
are
equiments
. Correct your spelling
requirements
Then
, I try again your items to double if it is working unfortunately is not working.
In addition
, I already inform
your Wrong verb form
informed
shop
regarding for
Change preposition
apply
this
problem but they Add a missing verb
are angy
angy
Correct your spelling
angry
to
me. The tone of his Change preposition
with
the
voice is shouting Correct article usage
apply
on
me. I am talking to him Change preposition
at
with
a good manner for asking regarding Change preposition
in
of
the item.
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apply
However
, I would to request a replacement for this
item. In addition
, please inform your staff to be nice to the costumer
who Correct your spelling
customer
asling
Correct your spelling
asking
question
regarding Fix the agreement mistake
questions
for
the items that they Change preposition
apply
dont
know. I Correct your spelling
do not
suggesting to have
a Wrong verb form
suggest having
custumer
service representative and Correct your spelling
customer
Correct article usage
a custumer
custumer
survey so that you can Correct your spelling
customer
evalaute
your Correct your spelling
evaluate
shop
what
is the problem.
I hope I will hear from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
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and what
Austia
Correct your spelling
Austria
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Be clear and concise in describing the problem with the equipment.
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Use a wider range of grammatical structures to demonstrate your language proficiency.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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