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You went on a holiday organized by a tour company. you think your tour guide was excellent. right a letter to the manager in your letter *described the details of your holiday explain *what the tour guide did that was helpful *suggests how he can be rewarded

#holiday #tour #company #guide #right #manager #*what #*suggests
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
the
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 letter in order to you for creating the most effective imagination holiday for me, that I had
last
 week
in
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on
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 your professional
tour
 especially your
tour
 leader when I had chosen
go
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to go
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 to
the
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apply
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Jill
castle
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Castle
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 on Yellow Hill. In fact, I am grateful
of
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to
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 your
tour
guide
 Mr Jackson, because of his perfect
manager
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management
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in
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of
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 time and especially his
completely
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complete
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 information about the places,
where
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we visited
them
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apply
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in
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on
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 our trip.
Ondouptedly
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Undoubtedly
, that trip was a memorable holiday for me,
at
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as
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the
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a
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 result your
tour
guide
 could create a friendly atmosphere among all fellow
traveler
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traveller
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. We had
spent
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a happy time
by
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with
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 perfect music
in
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on
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 our bus.
Hence
, he had
intierty
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interesting
 information about
Castle
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the Castle
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,
such
 as
it's
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its
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 environment and history.
Also
, he could help us to purchase the best craftsman for our family members. I
recalled
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recall
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 we had an old woman
in
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on
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 our bus
that
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in
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 the middle of
day
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the day
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she
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who
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 had a panic. At
the
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first time, we had
afraided
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afraid
raided
, but your
tour
guide
can
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could
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 help her with his
medicine
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medical
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 knowledge that was so perfect.
Finally
, if it is possible you have a grateful
of
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apply
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him by reward or
suitable
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a suitable
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 gift. Because
,
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this
 kind of
encourages
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encouragement
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 can
be improved
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improve
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 your
guide
tours
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tour
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 skills. Many
thank
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thanks
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you
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apply
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for considering my letter. yours faithfully Souri Red
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