You went on a holiday organized by a tour company. you think your tour guide was excellent. right a letter to the manager in your letter described the details of your holiday explain what the tour guide did that was helpful *suggests how he can be rewarded

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing

this

letter in order to you

for creating

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the most effective imagination holiday for me, that I had

last

week on your professional

tour

especially your

tour

leader when I

had chosen

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chose

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to go to Jill Castle on Yellow Hill. In fact, I am grateful to your

tour

guide

Mr Jackson, because of his perfect management of time and especially his complete information about the places, we visited on our trip. Undoubtedly, that trip was a memorable holiday for me,

as a

result

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your

tour

guide

could create a friendly atmosphere among all fellow traveller. We had a happy time with perfect music on our bus.

Hence

, he had interesting information about the Castle,

such

as its environment and history.

Also

, he could help us to purchase the best craftsman for our family members. I recall we had an old woman on our bus in the middle of the day who had a panic. At first time, we

had

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afraid, but your

tour

guide

could help her with his medical knowledge

that

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which

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was so perfect.

Finally

, if it is possible you have a grateful him by reward or a suitable gift. Because

this

kind of encouragement can improve your

guide

tour

skills. Many thanks for considering my letter. yours faithfully Souri Red

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Make sure to address all points mentioned in the task description. You did not provide details about your holiday or suggest how the tour guide can be rewarded.

coherence cohesion

Organize your ideas logically and use appropriate transitional phrases to connect them.

lexical resource

Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and varied words to convey your ideas.

grammatical range

Pay attention to your sentence structures and improve your grammatical accuracy.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

217 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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