The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
These charts
shows
the changes Change the verb form
show
of
the Change preposition
in
employments
in the United Kingdom between 1988-2012.
Fix the agreement mistake
employment
Overall
, the charts presents
some Change the verb form
present
soaring
in the Replace the word
soar
women
's percent
and a normal Change the spelling
per cent
increasing
in the Replace the word
increase
men
's percent
Change the spelling
per cent
Firstly
, the women
category, who is working for
Change preposition
apply
a
full-time gets Correct article usage
apply
soaring
from 19% to 26%; Wrong verb form
soared
Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
then
numbers Correct your spelling
the
gets
higher from 4,482 to 7696; Change the verb form
get
Meanwhile
the Add a comma
Meanwhile,
women
with the
part-time jobs Correct article usage
apply
gets
Change the verb form
get
a
unnoticed Change the article
apply
increasing
with 2%, In the other hand the Replace the word
increase
men
with a full-time jobs
gradually goes down 53% in 1988 to 49% in 2012,Correct the article-noun agreement
full-time jobs
a full-time job
while
the part time
Add a hyphen
part-time
men
gets 1% overall
these years.
Secondly
,In 2012, while
the Correct word choice
apply
women
's category increases
sharply but with a small Wrong verb form
increased
percent
26% Change the spelling
per cent
The
Correct article usage
apply
men
goes
in Change the verb form
go
the
second place in the developing but the biggest number 53%, the total shows the big step Correct article usage
apply
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
The
UK's population Correct article usage
apply
takes
Wrong verb form
has taken
on
working individually with Change preposition
in
a numbers
from 23,839 to 29,600.Correct the article-noun agreement
numbers
a number
Submitted by nafisa.bulhan on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
▼